Monday, September 12, 2011

Week 4 Tuesday: Updated Story with Final Major Editing

The scene opens with a focus shot on Nerine's lighthouse from the ground level entrance. She then walks into the scene with her back facing the camera. The shot cuts to her approaching the front door were she puts down her bag of groceries to notice the eviction notice taped to her front door. Her hand hesitates but then she tugs the note off the door and with her shoulders slightly deflated enters her home. The next shot is from inside facing the door. We see her take off her flat shoes and place them next to a pair of heels and pair of men's oxfords. She tosses the eviction notice into an over-spilling waste basket by the door. The scene cuts on her walking to the kitchen (towards the camera). The next scene is facing the kitchen from the entrance she just left. The viewer sees Nerine's back as she makes her way to the table at the other end of the kitchen. Its full of vases of flowers in various stages of wilting.
Then she walks to the stove just to her right to make a grab for the tea kettle. The next cut is now from outside the window over the kitchen sink looking in to watch Nerine fill up the kettle with water. Then it goes back inside now from Nerine's right shoulder. She looks up out the window and pauses. The view outside is of the new lighthouse across the bay up on the cliffs. Back inside she looks over her shoulder. As she does the shot focuses on her fridge with many family photos on it at various points in her life (and a sympathy card or two). The camera focuses back on her as she glances up (metaphorically making eye contact with the lens of the lighthouse upstairs). We get a close up of her putting the kettle on the stove.
The next shot is from at the top of the lighthouse as Nerine is making her way up to the platform. She pauses when she gets to the top and stands there. Her back is to the viewer and we see the entire room including the lens in the middle. A vision of her and her father turning on and positioning the lens flashes before us and then disappears. The camera cuts to a close up of her face in a bittersweet smile and then walks forward. She kneels down and starts tinkering with it trying to get it to turn on and all it ends up doing is flickering before dying quickly. She starts to get rougher with it to turn it on but is suddenly startled by the kettle going off (there is a quick cut to the kettle whistling). She accidentally gets it to turn on and the light shoots to down in the water (show on the surface of the water the light focusing). Nerine looks at it for a second and then leaves quickly to get the kettle.
The camera cuts to the surface again and submerges down to the bottom where the light focuses on a dark shape. Cut to quickly Nerine picking up the kettle. Cut back to the dark figure as one of its eyes opens. Then the camera is set back a little to see the whole creature swimming upward. Back in the lantern room, Nerine merges with a hot cup of tea. She walks over to the lantern and sets down her tea. Down below, the fish is swimming around at the base of the lighthouse and when the len's light shines in its eyes they glow frantically and it roars. Then it submerges quickly and jumps out of the water. A quick cut to show from a profile view it hit the side of the lighthouse.
At the top of the lighthouse, Nerine falls over from the impact. She then gets up and looks out one of the windows to see the fish ram into the side again. She braces herself against the window. Then she looks over and focuses on the lens as the lighthouse continues to shake. She runs over to shield it from breaking.
Then the fish rams the lighthouse one more time and it with the lighthouse all come crashing down into the sea. The camera focuses on whats left of the foundation and slowly zooms out to the same shot as the opening. A large fin appears out of the water with Nerine and lays her on the shore. She opens her eyes to see the fish submerge into the water. She then looks over her left shoulder to see whats left of her home. The camera switches to a wide view of the remnants with her standing as the camera slowly zooms out. The next shot is of her sitting aboard a train with the view of the lighthouse ruins. She looks at it one last time but then looks down to a brochure in her hand. The train continues over a hill into the distance.

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